Fiction Adaptation: Script

Fiction Script

This script is not the final version but just a rough to hand in and check I am on the right lines.
I am happy that i managed to create a story line as I only had bullet points on what I wanted to go into the script but not the order. However I am not happy with this script as I haven't used final draft in a while so I couldn't remember how to show the words on screen in the script so I just wrote on screen which I feel is wrong, I also feel that I didn't write this properly as I am not so good at writing and have no interest in script writing so I feel that Helen would be able to give me loads of good feedback that I can improve on.